Noen her som er gode i engelsk og kan hjelpe?

[Anonym bruker]

Her er noen separate utdrag av et arbeid. Er engelsken grei, eller er det mye som må endres på??

 

.................The companies increases their power further through the European Union, World Trade Organization, North American Free Trade Agreement and other trade agreements that piece by piece removes the state's capability to have and pass laws in the beast means for the people and the environment. In a rapidly incresing degree, the world's population lives under a dictatorship of some few, but gigantic businesses. The dictatorship also pushes into people's culture and self-image through commercials and entertainment industries that work for the powerful interests. They create and image where each and every human being reduces to a consumer. In this picture a personal happiness in dependant upon the big-companies' name brands and big companies' sodas. The capistalistic profit logic forces into all areas of society and destroys the solitarian fellowship. The extensive commercialization creates self-centered and egoistical people who are raised in the belief that happiness is money..................

 

.................. This was a socialism radically unlike the one many had supported. Visionary thoughts about new societies were formulated by learnd and upper-class men and quite often they saw themselves in the main part as the society's savior. Socialism could at that time be a kind of founding; the informed had to save the poor from their own misery. With these ideas about socialism, Karl Marx founded the traditions of socialism. The society in itself takes an active part in the shaping of society. In a matter of fact, the Marxism was in many ways popular in those days. Unfortunately, socialism did not mange to reach the top around the nineteenth century.....

 

........ It is time for people to open their eyes and see how the world around them is. The fact that we could feed the whole population, and save one billion human being every year as long as everyone living on this globe believed in socialism, is for some a horrible fact. Some might walk around, wanting to do something about this cause, but cannot because the majority does not agree with them. To be a part of the world's populatin should mean to be a part of it fully. To concern about the people of our eart, and wanting to help reagardless of who that is, and if it is someone you know. Most have heard that famous quote, which came out of the mouth of a great man, who wrote himself down in history for eternity; "Catch a man a fish, and you cal sell it to him. Teach a man to fish, and you ruin a wonderful business opportunity" - Karl Marx............

 

............ Learn how to love and care for the world that we live in, and it will be a better place of all to live. Regardless of ethnicity or our background, a socialist society will give all equal opportunites. Teaching the people that all and not only some are superior. A keyword is to believe in the pople of the society, and this created great trust. for a society or government to work, people have to trust. Socialism creates trust, at the same time as it creates a better society for the people to live in. People in the world today focus more on materalistic good than what is around them. This need to be object for change. For socialism to work, it must be a shared dream and a wish of all people of society. It is in a matter of cact a society made for the people, by the people. Basic good for free, a safe fututre and no starvation in our world. It might be looked upon as a silly childhood dream, a world where people is the center and we all are equal... It is possible, just as they say; "nothing is impossible, impossible is nothing". It is on time that people salute and welcome the new world. The world of socialism....

 

 

[Anonym bruker]

Du har endel ordfeil og feil i settningsoppbyggning. Innholdet er interessant. Skal prøve å få mannen min til å lese korrektur.

[Anonym bruker]

Ville aldri lagt ut dette på nett, kan jo bli sporet opp på plagiatkontroll så får du trekk for kopiering..

 

Men i første setning heter det; The companies INCREASE (they increase, he/she/it INCREASES) their power..

[Gjest -<<-]

En del Norwenglish setningsstruktur ("a keyword is to believe"...), ganske mange gale verbbøyninger (mest at verb som skal være 3. person flertall bøyes som 3. person entall; "the companies increases", "trade agreeements that removes"...), noen rene ordfeil ("beast=best," "mange=manage," "populatin=population"...).

 

 

[Anonym bruker]

øverst inne på word finnes det en rettskrivningsprogram, det kommer røde streker under feil, og det kommer grønne streker når det er mindre alvorlige feil, om du bruker de programmene så får du ryddet opp i de felste probelene.

[Gjest -<<-]

Autokorrektur i tekstbehandlingsprogrammer vil bare fange opp rene stavefeil. Setningsstruktur og feil verbbøying må fortsatt bearbeides manuelt.

[Anonym bruker]

beast, mange, populatin er bare trykkfeil da jeg skrev dem over her. Ellers takk for svar.

[Tokatter_USA]

Jeg kan ikke garantere at dette er korrekt, og noen steder vet jeg ikke hva du mener, men jeg kan ikke dy meg og retter litt:

 

 

 

.................The companies increase their power further through the European Union, World Trade Organization, North American Free Trade Agreement and other trade agreements that piece by piece remove the state's capability to have and pass laws in the best interest of the people and the environment. To a rapidly increasing degree, the world's population lives under a dictatorship of a few, but gigantic businesses. The dictatorship also invades people's culture and self-image through commercials and entertainment industries that work for the powerful interests. They create an image where each and every human being is reduced to a consumer. In this picture a personal happiness is dependent upon the big companies' name brands and big companies' sodas. The capitalistic profit logic forces into all areas of society and destroys the solitarian fellowship [solitarian fellowship? Hva er det?]. The extensive commercialization creates self-centered and egotistical people who are raised in the belief that happiness is money..................

 

.................. This was a socialism radically unlike the one many had supported. Visionary thoughts about new societies were formulated by learned and upper-class men and quite often they saw themselves in the role (?) of society's savior. Socialism could at that time be a kind of founding (?); the informed had to save the poor from their own misery. With these ideas about socialism, Karl Marx founded the traditions of socialism. The society in itself takes an active part in the shaping of society. As a matter of fact, Marxism was in many ways popular in those days. Unfortunately, socialism did not manage to reach the top around the nineteenth century.....

 

........ It is time for people to open their eyes and see how the world around them is. The fact that we could feed the whole population, and save one billion human beings every year as long as everyone living on this globe believed in socialism, is for some a horrible fact. Some might walk around, wanting to do something about this cause, but cannot because the majority does not agree with them. To be a part of the world's population should mean to be a part of it fully. To be concerned about the people of our earth, and wanting to help regardless of who that is, whether or not it is someone you know. Most have heard that famous quote, which came out of the mouth of a great man, who [wrote himself down in history - dette er ikke riktig, men akkurat nå kommer jeg ikke på den riktige måten å si det på] for eternity; "Catch a man a fish, and you can sell it to him. Teach a man to fish, and you ruin a wonderful business opportunity" - Karl Marx............

 

............ Learn how to love and care for the world that we live in, and it will be a better place for all to live. Regardless of ethnicity or our background, a socialist society will give all equal opportunites. Teaching the people that all and not only some are superior [dette er ikke en fullstendig setning.]. It is key to believe in the people of the society, and this creates great trust. For a society or government to work, people have to trust. Socialism creates trust, at the same time as it creates a better society for the people to live in. People in the world today focus more on materialistic goods than what is around them. This needs to be object for change. For socialism to work, it must be a shared dream and a wish of all people of society. It is as a matter of fact a society made for the people, by the people. Basic goods for free, a safe future and no starvation in our world. It might be looked upon as a silly childhood dream, a world where people is the center and we all are equal... It is possible, just as they say; "nothing is impossible, impossible is nothing". It is time that people salute and welcome the new world. The world of socialism....

 

Mye kunne vært skrevet klarere og med bedre setningsoppbygging, men jeg er ingen engelsklærer, har bare bodd i USA i 24 år og tok bare det mest innlysende. Ganske bra likevel, da!

Men sa Karl Marx virkelig det? Var han sarkastisk?